For over the past six years every morning when my students walk in the door I have felt so happy about see them again and my classroom take on life again; being a primary school teacher feels so natural to me. Yet for the past few months was longing for and thinking about a few personal challenge in the field of primary education. As I'm very intrigued by different cultures and languages, I've decided to start looking for a position at an international school.
As a relatively young international school which I would like to be member of pioneering and ambitious team, your school attracted my attention. I also liked the fact it is a Dutch subsidized school with competitive fees open to a very broad variety of students. Last, I value the multicultural setting of your school added by the experience of living in Amsterdam and the Netherlands, as I think this city and the Dutch culture have much to offer.
Even though teaching secondary school students might be a future possibility for me, I am initially interested in groups 3-8 because to me, children of these ages are very spontaneous and eager to learn at the same time able to communicate and discuss well.
I am an open minded person with excellent social skills who tolerates pressure easily. Group management, organizing and planing is natural for me. By graduating in a outstanding technical university and working several years as a consulting engineer and group leader in the field of logistics and genera, management, I developed my rational, coordinating and analytical skills, so I decided to really follow my heart and passion to become a primary school teacher.
I believe value would be added to you organization with my skills And enthusiasm as well I would appreciate very much to be interviewed so we could discuss more about the job description, my motivation and suitability .
Yours sincerely
Candidate Y
A good job, Martin, but there is not an original letter to compare it with... So I had to search the original one. I like how you don't use the ellipsis(...) and instead you continue with the same sentence. In the second paragraph, I like the omission of the words "so it is" and linking both sentences. One of the things that I liked the most was the use of the word "By" at the beginning of the third paragraph, because it links all the ideas in the paragraph. A very good job, Martin! A+!
ResponderEliminarDear Joaquin.
EliminarThe task never said we had to include the original letter in the post 🙈🙉
Thank you though, I appreciate comments.
Very good use of the first clause and the avoid of starting the sentences with but , I think this task deserves and outstanding grade such as a 7
ResponderEliminarVery nice work here Martin, even though it does include a few mistakes, like a perfect slab which is just missing a few tinnies. I think this surely deserves a 7, good on ya mate. Have a good one.
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